【写作任务】
假如你是马悦。初中阶段的第一个学期快要结束了,你和几个好朋友谈论起了你们各自最喜欢的课程以及对初中生活的看法。请你根据下表提示,写一篇不少于60词的英语短文,把你们谈论的内容在下周的英语班会上和大家分享。
姓名
最喜欢的课程
对初中生活的看法
马悦
英语
有趣,结交了许多新朋友
李莉
数学、历史
学习有点难,但是会努力
王芳
学习了很多东西
【任务分析】
该写作任务要求根据提示信息写作,因此要把表格中的内容都清楚地表达出来。同时,也要避免对信息的简单罗列,注意合理使用连接词。
【学生习作】
Hello, everyone! My favorite subject is English. I think the middle school life is interesting. I have many new friends. Wang Fang's favorite subject is English, too. She thinks she learns a lot this term. Li Li's favorite subjects are math and history. The lessons in the middle school are a little difficult for her, but she will try to learn them well.
【习作点评】
1.?该习作内容全面、语言准确,并对所给信息进行了整合——自己和王芳都最喜欢英语课,因此把二者的信息放在一起,体现了作者清晰的思路。
2.?在描述各自喜欢的课程时,作者使用了sb.'s favorite subject is ...?的结构。如果能使表达多样化,就更好了。
【习作改进】
Hello, everyone! My favorite subject is English. I think the middle school life is interesting. I have many new friends.?Wang Fang likes English best, too.?She thinks she learns a lot this term.?Math and history are Li Li's favorite subjects.?The lessons in the middle school are a little difficult for her, but she will try to learn them well.